I cling to his hand the entire time. We go deep into the green maze, not stopping for anything. He pauses staring at something, too far for me to see but I know it’s bad as he pulls up the rifle. “JACK, who’s there, JACK!” I scream. He pulls me into the hollow of an oak tree. I peek my head around but I can’t see anything. A shadowy figure appears a few metres away. I go to scream but I can’t. I turn my head to look at him with fear in my eyes. Get me out of here.
Fantastic piece of writing Kayah! You included lots of suspense and it was really scary. I especially liked the way every new sentence built up even more fear. You should be very proud of this writing.
Nicola Richardson, team 100wc, Tyne and Wear, UK